Usually, I'm not very interested in stories involving only Jack after the Gamestation, but I'm so glad I gave your story a try, it's brilliant ! Your OCs are fully built characters - I can feel that you gave them personalities and histories, which not every author manages to do ! I really like how you told the story, too, jumping from one year to another. The timespan covered shows how the Warehouse and the team grew very well. I'm also glad that you made Jack a more mature man - not just feeling sorry for himself and waiting, but actually finding a purpose and a life of his own. Mattie was so sweet and I loved how Sarah got some self confidence and competences. Percy's family was a nice touch too, and I love that you put in an alien team member (not enough friendly aliens in the show, methinks). I knew he would be in charge of Torchwood in the end, but I still felt gleeful reading it. Like everyone else, I'd be very interested to see how this new and improved Torchwood turns out to be, either in this timeperiod, in the 20th century (like in the 40ties ;-D), or in the 21th with our usual Torchwood Team (with modifications, obviously). If you're doing a sequel, I'd really like it if you did a chapter per decade, and kept changing things, (Estelle, the war, other missed meeting with the Doctor, but Jack realising he doesn't want to leave ?) so when you get to the canon era, the full fledged organisation would be different and better (no Yvonne Hartman and Ghost shifts, for example). The Doctor could find out about it, would be fun ^^ (I thought the note Jack left him on the Gamestation was a good detail by the way). Oh and what about Jack realising he's basically the founder of the Torchwood Archives (which I belive would still exist in the 51st?) Sorry about rambling for so long, I got a bit carried away. Thank you for this story, I had a great time reading it. Niyalune
(I hope that review was coherent enough, English is not my 1st language and I'm tired ^^)
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Your OCs are fully built characters - I can feel that you gave them personalities and histories, which not every author manages to do !
I really like how you told the story, too, jumping from one year to another. The timespan covered shows how the Warehouse and the team grew very well.
I'm also glad that you made Jack a more mature man - not just feeling sorry for himself and waiting, but actually finding a purpose and a life of his own. Mattie was so sweet and I loved how Sarah got some self confidence and competences. Percy's family was a nice touch too, and I love that you put in an alien team member (not enough friendly aliens in the show, methinks).
I knew he would be in charge of Torchwood in the end, but I still felt gleeful reading it. Like everyone else, I'd be very interested to see how this new and improved Torchwood turns out to be, either in this timeperiod, in the 20th century (like in the 40ties ;-D), or in the 21th with our usual Torchwood Team (with modifications, obviously).
If you're doing a sequel, I'd really like it if you did a chapter per decade, and kept changing things, (Estelle, the war, other missed meeting with the Doctor, but Jack realising he doesn't want to leave ?) so when you get to the canon era, the full fledged organisation would be different and better (no Yvonne Hartman and Ghost shifts, for example). The Doctor could find out about it, would be fun ^^ (I thought the note Jack left him on the Gamestation was a good detail by the way).
Oh and what about Jack realising he's basically the founder of the Torchwood Archives (which I belive would still exist in the 51st?)
Sorry about rambling for so long, I got a bit carried away. Thank you for this story, I had a great time reading it.
Niyalune
(I hope that review was coherent enough, English is not my 1st language and I'm tired ^^)